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This Needs to Stop by ~willuholdme:iconwilluholdme:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Family Life > Open


My eyes are burning.
Won't you please
make them stop?
You just walk away;
slam the door in my face.
I hide in the bathroom.

I hate to fight
especially with you.
Why do we?
It's stupid I know,
but it's become a habit
when we're tired and upset.
We push the buttons
until they break off.

Now I grow cold.
Alone in the bathroom.
Looking in the mirror
and hating what I see.
©2004-2009 ~willuholdme
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~Runhilde Oct 31, 2004, 8:12:25 PM
the fighting is sad : (
the breaking off buttons part I found the most interesting
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~DesignerFreak Nov 1, 2004, 2:53:19 AM
You really know how to send a shiver down someone's spine.
It's ironic, the bit about pushing the buttons until they break off, because in the poem, the buttons being pressed are the ones that end up hurting another person, but when someone reads that part of the poem, you are opushing the right buttons, making us feel what we should be feeling. Pure emotion.
Again, well done :clap:
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~willuholdme Nov 1, 2004, 11:45:39 AM
thanks.

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I'm happier than I look. :heart:
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~murderousintentions Nov 2, 2004, 12:32:18 PM
Wow lovly poem! I feel like im there...in a way and the bit about the mirror is fab!well done!:)

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This Fire..Will Consume...As The Flames Purify.
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~willuholdme Nov 3, 2004, 5:06:40 PM
whoooooooooo!(jumping up and down)

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I'm happier than I look. :heart:
:iconwilluholdme:
~willuholdme Nov 3, 2004, 5:27:02 PM
thank you so much... it's good to know that my poems aren't just the crap i thought they were.

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I'm happier than I look. :heart:
:icondesignerfreak:
~DesignerFreak Nov 4, 2004, 5:22:49 AM
Believe me, they are far from it
:iconwilluholdme:
~willuholdme Nov 4, 2004, 11:37:25 AM
:)

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I'm happier than I look. :heart:
:iconmurderousintentions:
~murderousintentions Nov 4, 2004, 12:49:18 PM
lol

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This Fire..Will Consume...As The Flames Purify.
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~Starry628 Nov 8, 2004, 3:29:17 PM
It's really good. Sounds like what happens when I'm in a fight with a sibling.
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